JadeHaven

[Jade]

-General Stuff-


Name: JadeHaven


Nickname/Alias(es): Jade


Race: Pegasus


Gender: Female


Age: Mare, About 19


Additional Status: She Wears A Flower Necklace On Most Occasions, She Will Wear Her Gala Dress Only At The Gala, The Dress Has Some Green Fabric And Has A Whole Lot Of Exotic Flowers In All Colors (That Are In And Aren't In The Rainbow) But Not Too Much.




-Physical Stuff-





Pelt Color: A Light Jade(ish) Color, That's Why She Was Named JadeHaven


Mane/Tail Color and Style: The Color Is 2 Shades Of Orange, One Darker That The Other, Seems To Be Opposite Due To The Fact That Blue And Orange Are Opposites And Red And Green Are Opposites, So In Turn Green (Her Pelt Color) And Orange (Her Mane And Tail Colors) Are Technically Opposites


Eye Color: A Light Orange Mixed With Light Yellow, It Looks Similar To The Lighter Orange Color In Her Mane And Tail, She Appears To Have A Brighter Gleam In Her Eyes During The Day (By That I Mean The White Lit Up Part In The Colored Iris Area


Cutie Mark: A Coil Of Red Flowers With A Dark Green Stem, She Has A Fascination For Flowers And She Knows A Lot About Flowers, Her Cutie Mark Involves Flowers


Other Scars/Markings: She Has A Small Scar In The Lower Left Part Of Her Left Wing, It Hurts When Something/Someone Touches It, She Got It From A Gardening Accident, (Yes I Changed It)


Physique: She Is A Very Slender, And Moderate, She Is Sort Of In The Middle, She Has A Small Frame But Is Claustrophobic, How Wierd (Sarcasm.
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-Social Stuff-





Current Residence: Ponyville, In Residence 1207 (Subject To Change For RolePlays)


Job: She Grows Her Own Food And Sells Half Of The Food She Grows, She Uses Custom Made Fertilizer To Make The Plants Grow All The Time, Even During Winter, It Is Magically Enhanced By One Of Her Unicorn Friends, It Makes Her At The Very Least 20 Bits A Day.

Mother: She Is JadeWinter, She Is A Pegasus, She Gave JadeHaven Her Green Pelt, Wings, And Gardening Abilities


Father: SongBird, He Is A Singer In Manehattan And Does Not Bond Too Much With JadeHaven, He Gave Her His Orange Eyes And Mane/Tail Color


Sibling(s): She Has A Younger Brother Named FoalSong, He Has Songbird's Eyes, Pelt, And Mane/Tail Colors, He Is Almost Completely Orange, He Has Excellent Singing, He Has No Cutie Mark, She Recently Found Out That She Has An Older Sister, She Is A Unicorn, She Has No Idea What She's Like Because She lives In Canterlot And JadeHaven Has Never Been There.


Other Family: She Has An Aunt Named FableSong, Almost Everypony On Her Dad's Side Can Sing Very Well, Why Else Would They All Have "Song" In Their Names.


Closest Friends: Hendrix, And GaleBane, Hendrix Is A Unicorn And GaleBane Is A Pegasus, They Are Related, They Said They Are Very Close Cousins.

Courting/Courted By: GaleStride, He Is GaleBane's Twin Brother, And No, Neither Of Them Are Evil, Despite One Of Them Having Bane In Their Name

Mate: N/A

Foal(s): N/A



-Personality Stuff-




Likes: The Color Jade, All Friends (Who Doesn't), Not Liking Enemies (Once Again, Who Doesn't), Fun, Laughter , Pie, Cake, Sweets, Bargaining (Instead Of Earning More, She Bargains To Make The Customer Like Her, She Decreases The Price), She Is Interested In The Sun (Nopony Has Much Info So She Plans To Visit The Library In Canterlot And Learn More About It, If Not She Can Read About It), She Sure Has A Lot Of Likes So I'll Save Some For Later, Maybe Edit The Post.


Dislikes: Liking Enemies, Disliking Friends, Boring Stuff, Her Plants Drying Out Because When She Goes Out Of Town She Tells Somepony To Water Them (And They Aren't That Reliable, Maybe She'll Think Twice About The People She Hires), The Dark Sometimes (The Dark Is A Bad Place Sorta So That's Why), Hatred (It's Not Magic), Non-Friendship People (They're Not Magic), Diamond Tiara And Silver Spoon (JadeHaven Appreciates The So Called 'Blank Flanks' For How Much They Want Their Cutie Marks, She Doesn't Really Dislike Them That Much Though)


Motivation: She Gets Up In The Morning Thinking About What She Does Every Day, Plants Seeds, Waters Existing Plants, Sells Food, And Then Eats Dinner (She Includes A Little Lunch), Seems Very Boring But It Gets Her Up In The Morning (Out Of Bed)


Strengths: She Excels In Flying (Most Of The Time), Plants Exceedingly And Does It Well, She Can Lift Quite A Lot With Her Wings Byt Themselves (I'd Say They Can Bench Press About 20 Lbs.), She Can Knit Quite Well Without Magic, She Also Can Tame Some Animals (Well, Calm Them Down), And She Can Exceed In All Of This Too.


Weaknesses/Flaws: She Has Been Weak To Temperatures Less Than 12 Degrees Farenheit, She Always Can't Resist Getting The Parasprites Off Of Her Plants (She Can Be *Ahem* Dealt With On This Occasion), She Hates Garbage On The Ground (So Anypony Can Do Something To Her When She's Picking Up Litter), She Is Weak To Many Magical Affects (Such As A Defective Spell That Can Do Something Really Bad, She Has A Higher Chance Of The Bad Part Rather Than The Better Occasion), And She Has Really Sloppy HoofWriting (Most Ponies Couldn't Read One Bit Of Her HoofWriting, Not Even The Letter 'A' Mostly)


Fears: She Fears That Something Could Happen In A Way (But That Doesn't Stop Her), She Fears Low Temperatures (Such Temperatures Are Any Lower Than 12 Degrees Farenheit), She Also Fears The Dark (Once Again It's A Bad Place Sorta)


Overall Persona: She Is A Great Gardener, That Is Her Job, That Is Her Life, She Likes To Be In The Spotlight But She Doesn't Want People To Be Unappreciative About It, She Would Never Steal The Spotlight Though.  She Is A Real Nice Pony And She Doesn't Let A Friend Down.  She Really Appreciates Other People's Work, Even If Some Of Her Friends Don't Like It.  She Thinks That She Will One Day Be Able To Win The Blue Ribbon In The "Best Pie Competition."  She Thinks That She Will One Day Be A Very Successful Pony, She Can't Because She's In Debt Right Now, Still Owes 257 Bits.  She Thinks That She Will One Day Accomplish The Wishes And Dreams Of Very Few Ponies, To Be The Hero Of Something, Anything, She Doesn't Care As Long As It Is Not The Hero Of Villainy Or Anything Like That.  The Dreams She Has Are An Enigma To Herself, She Does Not Understand Why She Wants To Accomplish These Dreams, She Will Never Understand The Enigma Of Her Own Mind.  She Is A Nice, Kind, Loving, Friendly, And Cool (At Least To Her Friends,) Pony, All Of The Ponies Who Are Not Her Friends Are Missing Out, With The Fact Of Not Being With One (Not The Most But Just One) Of The Only Few 95% Of The Time Happy And Kind Ponies Around Ponyville.  She Personally Thinks She's A Little Mean To Some Of The Ponies Around But It's Just That They Don't Think She's Nice So They Spread Rumors Or Something Else Most Likely, (She Didn't Say Who They Were So Pity On Whoever Does That To Her.)  In A Nutshell She Is A Kindhearted Pony That Likes Enjoying Time With Her Friends.         


Backstory: 

[Nimbus]

Right, okay, well the application is far too short, and the first person narrative isn't really something that we prefer, also the character itself seems to have ridiculous amounts of power, and is obviously rather generic, in fact, as harsh as it seems, I can't even begin to think this is a serious application due to the nature in which it has been written.

If you're serious about joining the site, I suggest looking at other applications, I don't really know where to begin here

[Jade]

Also (Lol 1269 Words)

[Jade]

Also I Went Into As Much Detail As Possible

[Jade]

BTW This Took Me Like 9 Hours To Make So At Least Gimme A Chance

[Jade]

OC Update!

V: 1.1

-Removed Something Not So Needed

-Made A Few Minor Changes

-New Update Says, There May Be Some Unnecessary Points In This OC Log/Application/Thing Or Something IDK

-Untold Update, Changed From MoonShine To JadeHaven, That Means This Is 1.2 Sorta

-Changed Update Status From 1.1 To 1.2

-WIP Things
I'm Going To Change A Few Aspects, From Start To Finish, Anything Not Needed, Not Wanted, Or Unnecessary Needs To Be Removed


Changing OC Name, I Need To Think Of A Better One


She Needs Some Other Details, I May Or May Not Add Them In Within A Week Or Two


-That's It For Today's Character Update, I'll Try To Add More  

[CableZ]

Please stop posting in the thread so many times, just edit one of your posts, the mod will review the changes when he see's them

[Jade]

Update Time, A Few Minutes After 1.2 But Here It Goes

Update 1.2.1

-Deleted Unnecessary Things In Application

-Added Reason "To Get Accepted Here"

Nothing Else Added To The Update, I'm Glad I Didn't Use 1.3 Because That Would Take Up Way Too Much Updates, I'm Going To Put Major Updates Into The Next Stage (Ex: At Least 5 Things Changed = Update 1.3

-WIP Aspects

Creating New 1.0 Stage OC

Putting Characters Into Adoption

Writing A Roleplay Script For When My Characters Get Accepted Into The World Of MLP: FiM Roleplaying

[Jade]

No More Character Updates From Now On So I'm Probs Gonna Ignore Updating And Changing Things For A Looong Time, 
P.S: CableZ Was Right, It Is Kind Of Annoying Posting Updates Every Other Minute

[Nimbus]

Right okay, not been online for a bit due to some personal stuff but I can see clearly there have been many updates to this

First off I would say only leave the headings in bold, it makes it very hard to read it.

Other than that, well I think it goes a bit far to say that Twilight "Zapped" your character. Reason being that we tend to avoid a much canon character dependancy in backstories as we can, because it seems a little odd for a character we have never heard of to be involved with them, so as for that aspect of the application, I don't think involving the OC already with characters in the show is ideal, especially the mane six. Also Depression isn't within the canon of the show, yes it is a real world issue, but with no mention of it and it being a rather dark and sensitive subject it isn't really something I think should be in a Pony characters traits, or even past. It isn't that it isn't "Giving you a chance" on that earlier comment, it is simply that we don't want there to be characters that we aren't certain will work slipping onto the boards

Try and imagine the character as part of the show as it is, even possibly look at other character bios

[Jade]

Okay Nimbus, I Will Re-Write The Parts You Said Were Not Very "Show Accurate," You Are Right, Not Very Show Accurate.

(Edit: I'm Done! Changing The Stuff That Is)

(Edit PS: I Changed It Up A Little, Death Was A Little Dark And I Added A Little Things To It So Review Away! PS- Answers Are Accepted Or Not Accepted, Not Something Like Neither Nor Not Accepted At All Or Else You Are A Little B- Whoops, Can't Say That, It's A Kid's Show)

[Nimbus]

Thanks for making this easier to read and such, sorry It has taken a while to get back to you, life gets in the way, you know? Yeah basically this application is looking a lot better, I just don't think the small depression part is appropriate

[Jade]

I Understand It's Not So Show Appropriate Now So Thanks For Telling Me, I'll Get On It Now!

I Changed It Nimbus So Is It Kay If It Says That "The Dark Is A Bad Place Sorta," ?

[CableZ]

Okay well I'm just going to step in so we can get this app finally accepted.

The overall persona needs to be 250 words minimum Jade, I figured you would have seen that this by now.

It's perfectly acceptable writing the app from the characters perspective but you swap back and forth from 3rd and 1st person through the app. If ou have nothing to fill in for a section on either, its simply easier and preferable to write N/A for a section that you don't have anything for.

When writing persona or any part of the app, don't mention other canon characters, we want you to use your own words to describe your character, not compare them to a canon character as thats simply lazy. Whats weirder is that you've said she isn't like the characters you've mentioned so why mention it?

Just as a side note, the double spacing between lines isn't that necessary with sections in the same category.

You know you could always read other apps and double check the template while you're waiting, you could have easier seen all these issues yourself if you had taken some initiative .

[Jade]

Well CableZ, I Don't Plan To Edit Her Stuff Until' The Weekend When I Have Time, I Have Plenty Of Things To Do And Some Of My Friends Get Irritated When I Am Not Online On X-Box Live. It's Also Bugging Me That Jade Is At The Very Least 3 Months Old, I NEED Her Accepted Soon, She Is A Nice Pony And Needs This Done For... Well, Her, She Can't Be A Living, Breathing Pony Until' She Is REAL. Anyways I WILL Fix Those Problems On The Weekend Kay.